Georgeann Kastel
Wednesday, July 13, 2011
Is this a good story beginning? I think it's not attracting much interest.?
You're dumping too much dull information on the reader in a clunky way. No child describes a parent as 'my 35 year old mother, Arlana' for instance.
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